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the blue spectrum cellophane and baking powder espy flecks of sunlight as they cling to pieces of detail, liquid upon contact in landscapes.
the comparison of choices and casual destinies collide under accidental stars,
who hide behind trees, with fishing nets cast so perfectly across their bodies.
we sit between luggage, swaying in sync with our heartbeat-throb of suggestion,
knitted with wool too thick, a string of solid haze.
(there was a whisper among us,
that no one would reconstruct.)
as erratic as an unfolded neckline,
matching the sea line,
opposing the sky line.

there were no lines which we could not create.
©2009-2010 ~gedwaylem
:icongedwaylem:

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written, and posted, in the arms of exhaustion

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:icondynoknu:
Oddly... Sharp. It reminds me of television-screen static. I had to read it a couple of times to catch all of the points.

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:toast: :lemon: :absolut: :bug: :coffeecup: :gun:
as if this is the end.
:icongedwaylem:
ah yes, i tend to be a lot more scatty when in a state of exhaustion. everything i write seems so passive to me though...ah well. thank you for reading over it more than once

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:iconepstein:
awesome

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. . ..and as my head hit the pillow, i awoke.. . .
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:icongedwaylem:
thank you

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:iconyouinventedme:
a very strong opening bit
and magnificent flow
throughout

:love:

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:icondailylitdeviations:
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Keep writing and keep creating.

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the blue spectrum cellophane and baking powder espy flecks of sunlight as they cling to pieces of detail, liquid upon contact in landscapes


Magnificent opening, bravo!

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BT.

"The truth knocks on the door and you say, "Go away, I'm looking for the truth," and so it goes away."
— Robert M. Pirsig
Zen and the Art of Motorcycle maintanance
:icongedwaylem:
so glad you think so, thank you

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:icongedwaylem:
an honour, and so appriciated. thank you.

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz

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