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the daylight seeps into my skin, skimming the surface
after, treading pores pitfalls,
expanding into white wash flowing
under the guise
of magenta and poise
purified.
fugitive of space,
lover of time,
curser of shadowed scars
left by the birds of an age.
you exist between parallel realities-
pushing the sides apart
with your milk stained fingers,
furthering another from other,
spread with unseen intensity, insistent that you create
whole voids for your windows-
to whisper your ideas
of what energy should be
confined to
the lawless,
dilapidated,
aimless in their roots,
through the
cracks-grotesque:letters stain the table
cloth
©2009-2010 ~gedwaylem
:icongedwaylem:

Author's Comments

hm keep wanting to add to this and change it around and rewrite it, though not in the sense that im not satisfied with it, but rather in the sense that i feel like it should be ever changing for some reason

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:iconjudas130:
it does seem to connote some state of flux certainly, i felt as if i fell upon the words, as if in stream. The imagery is interesting, and your wording further still 'treading pores pitfalls'

thank you for sharing this

:peace:

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a voice inside my head breaks the analogue.

~Judas130
:icondynoknu:
Beauteous, and I think I understand what you mean. I read the words as if they had a very bumpy current pushing them along. Bravo~

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:toast: :lemon: :absolut: :bug: :coffeecup: :gun:
as if this is the end.
:icongedwaylem:
*tips hat*, im really glad that it comes across that way,

thank you for commenting and reading, muchly appriciated

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:icongedwaylem:
hm you and judus both mentioned something to a similar effect about the current/stream, interesting. thank you for the kind words and the favourite

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:iconegorequiem:
again, i just love how you use words, it´s so thoughtful , and yet it is not complicated or tying to be something is not, it´s just how your mind works, i´d guess?

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George´s law of rightness: i can either be right or not as right as i´d like, and if i´m not as right as i´d like, and i do apologize, so i´m not pompous or anything, even though most of the times i am right! so most of the time i don´t apologize.
:icongedwaylem:
thank you ego=), im glad you enjoy it.
to a degree i would suppose,
though states of mind do change
and in turn as does the type of thinking
know what i mean?

--
"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz
:iconegorequiem:
yes i do!! and it´s great that it does!

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George´s law of rightness: i can either be right or not as right as i´d like, and if i´m not as right as i´d like, and i do apologize, so i´m not pompous or anything, even though most of the times i am right! so most of the time i don´t apologize.
:iconbaarish:
i like the jaggedness of this poem. i feel a sense of bleak distance from the self. it's a very honest and human under the sci-fi textures.
:icongedwaylem:
ah, cant believe imissed your comment here, ah the curse of being scatterbrained. im glad you like. hm and ya ithink that distance is definitely a factor

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"millions long for immortality who do not know what to do with themselves on a rainy sunday afternoon." -susan ertz

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